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WebSlam VIII – Round 2

Prompts

Submissions are closed for Round 2. Round 3 prompts will be online by 8:00 a.m. Monday, November 13.

Students responded to the following prompts for Round 2. Scroll down to read their work.

  1. Personify* an abstract idea or noun. What does _________wear? Where does _______ go grocery shopping? What does __________ do for a living? Create a vivid picture of character traits and behavior of such topics and themes as death, hope, democracy, courage, etc.
    * Encarta® World English Dictionary Definition of ‘Personify’
    1. to be an embodiment or perfect example of something
    2. to represent an abstract quality as a human being, especially in art or literature
    3. to ascribe human qualities to an object or abstract notion


  2. Be an activist poet: Research and write a poem from a political point of view. Be specific and know your facts. Use the Internet - www.nytimes.com, www.sfnewmexican.com, www.cnn.com, or just about any other newspaper, television network, or alternative news source (www.pitt.edu/~ctnst3/xnews.html) can be found - to research a topic, event or theme that you’d like to write about; e.g., hospice care for the poor, the war in Iraq, plight of illegal Mexican immigrants to the U.S. , exercise for teens, etc.

  3. Write a poem that reflects your relationship with your culture, heritage, ancestry. Dig as deep as you can to learn about who you are and where you came from. What does this mean to you? Your parents? The children you might someday have?

Tips:

  • We advise that you use a word processing program to type your poem, so you can spell check it. Block, copy and paste the poem into the Submit Form.
  • Withhold conclusions—your own feelings of like/dislike, approval/disapproval, etc.—and let the language of your poem do the work of making the reader see your intent.

Poems

Chief
Apryl Chavez — Santa Fe Indian School
aprylkateri@yahoo.com


“Everything is fine, food is good, I’m safe.”
signed Joe D. Chavez.
You’re not supposed to tell
all that happened, against regulation,
so he kept his mouth shut
while his parents’ words sang.

Loving whispers temporarily muted
cacophonic screams of Pandora’s whirling contents,
screams cementing his eyes open in the darkness of dawn.

Large scale explosion reverberated leaving
a lightning bolt of dead skin tattooed on the
cove of his leathery right foot.
He stood fighting somewhere between
surrender and defeat,
between two
damned industrial cities.

Chief, the name given him
by his newfound buddies:
Jiron, Romero, Harley, Young, Price, Charley.
Playful eyes veiled by tiered sadness
reflect memories of his brothers.

He had promised himself that
one day he would march home.
He sits there now, arms crossed,
not as a hero but as a warrior, a brave.

I pray for those sad eyes,
for torched memories.
I shall hold on to the stories
for he gave them to me.
I sit hand in hand with him,
my grandfather.


Reviewer:     Joe Somoza, jsomoza@nmsu.edu
Rating: 8.0
Review: Your attempt to depict your grandfather’s war experience and its aftermath is ambitious, but your poem is a little confusing due to the many shifts in point of view, and to some confusing expression. For example, in stanza 1, you shift from his words to the use of 2nd person (you) to the 3rd person (his), trying to tell things from too many angles at the same time. Better to find one angle to tell the whole story from.

Also, regarding expression, it’s not clear what the two “industrial cities” refer to (stanza 3) or how you’re differentiating “hero” and “warrior” (stanza 5), both words having a positive suggestion.

Posted: Nov/11/2006 3:22 pm

Reviewer:     Manuel Gonzalez, xicanopoet@yahoo.com
Rating: 8.1
Review: This is a great poem about your grandfather’s war expierence. I would have liked it if you followed the prompts a little closer though. What does your grandfather’s expierence mean to you? Is it connected in any way to the expierences of the soldiers at war today? how? Is this legacy of war something that you’ve inherited and is it something you might have to pass on to your grandchildren?

Posted: Nov/11/2006 4:12 pm

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